Nothing overly complex for a build-up, but rather short and sweet. I like it a lot for the use of no dialogue to and slapstick done in such a short (but crisply) animated video.
I think sound effects might enhance the viewing experience
I like the concept, but the choppy animation, sound, and voice acting could be improved.
Something else you might want to consider, is beefing up the description. If someone (like me), sees this first, before any of the other videos in the series, said person might be confused as to what's going on.
Some sfx could be done, the possibility of a few easter eggs could be done, maybe different modes (easy, medium, and hard) with the possibility of checkpoints or lives, and lastly telling that the spacebar allows for skipping levels might be a bonus.
(And yes, it's a run-on sentence of sorts)
Indeed, I have yet to find a place to acquire sound effects, but they will be in the next update, whenever that happens.
Easter eggs would be good, thank you.
Different modes may be harder to implement, but I will see what I can do.
Probably should have explained about the space bar, however seeing as this is the first iteration, I assumed no-one would have to skip levels they've played before.
FUS ROH...F**** (Premature blow) I mean Dah? *Lydia runs off laughing... *I cry D:*
I know how people like to go all out on these reviews, but I'll make mine short and sweet.
-The awesome idea of visual novels in Newgrounds
-The available option for megaperverts to go straight to the hentai action
Stuff you could maybe add to the next one:
-Voice acting (for all the dialogue, and maybe a wider selection of sound effects for the moans)
-Even more positions for the hentai scenes.
-Um... Maybe merchandise? (Shirts?)
Those are my thoughts, so don't feel pressured to follow what I request. Just enjoy yourself in making these :D
Like any other form of art, what's presented, is a piece which can be interpreted by the listeners. And like any form of art, those who listen will sometimes lack reason as to why a song is "good" or "bad."
Disregarding the meaningless criticism, the song served its purpose quite well.
Fit the mood perfectly
Find the perfect time to upload a song and you'll most likely be set... otherwise your upload will get drowned out by other people's songs, or it won't get noticed. That's all I really have to say, considering the lack of a true definition for "good and bad" in terms of music.
Looks like it were an official art piece (the bar code definitely played a role, but the style you worked with was the biggest factor). Excellent work!
I like it, but I feel like a background would make it "cooler" (as the kids these days say)
Nobody cares about a background, you want a background? I'll give you a background but you ain't gunna like it.
The lines in the hair is mesmerizing (not sure that's a critique, but I just wanted you to know this is probably my favorite one by you)
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